Hard Cider
Photo Credit: fhrankee at deviantart
she was only a bad apple
because she fell too hard
and she would have been ok
had someone come along
and just
given her a little sugar
but instead, she was left there
to mull things over
and it would have been a shame too,
except, she made a nice hard cider.
yet another treasure I have uncovered on your blog! <3 LOVE this one Kellie, it's like you wrote it for my sixteen year old self
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I’m posting this on my wall above my writing desk with other examples of poems that inspire me to love words into being.
Lovely, simply lovely.
wow. Kris thank you! You made my day! Makes me happy to know I have inspired someone! ♥
love the ending!!!
Wonderful wordplay!
Its so simple yet so much to introspect, do we do same with people as with this bad apple../I live your write.. Made me introspect and this is what writing is all about
Lovely liked the simplicity
And when someone falls, people tend to look away and pretend not to see. They think that it will make them stronger if the person learns to get on their feet by themselves but in reality, falling alone is a dangerous place to be. Wonderful metaphors and very well crafted.
Love your use of metaphor in this, very clever!
You only fall hard once. The next time you just learn to land a bit softer
Fantastic! Perfectly penned!
Dear Kellie
Nice hard cider… how things happen in life … in moments when one has lost everything and dying gets its chance… thanks for sharing..
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-sighs.html
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Great words Kellie. You are a creative spirit and always have a beautiful energy in your poetry. xoxoxo
nice metaphorical play on/with words.
very good piece…enjoyable to read.
the clever play on words is so satisfying.
Good analogy, Kellie! A nice hard cider…sometimes that’s the best, even if it can be a rough process to make it. It is a wonder though, the difference a little sugar can make in a life…and this time of year, that sort of sweetness should certainly be on all sorts of people’s minds…
Sometimes you extend generosity to someone and it changes everything….love this, Kellie.
A little sugar does go a long way! Great metaphor!
Really enjoyed the piece. I like the universal idea about If only’s and this one is strong, the spin from that point could have gone in a few directions, but I like the manner you took it, ending in the hard cider. I like when i read a piece that is really open to multiple ideas. The notion of hard cider really could mean a few things, all fitting, but each offering their own slant upon the interpretation. Great job, thanks
You had me with the freaking awesome title! I love this…but again, I’m still carrying a few bruises from watching folks walk by when I needed my own bit of sugar! lol Wonderful weave, Poet!
Hi Kellie! She makes a great hard cider…made me chuckle. That’s probably the way I prefer it though…tart!
A very nice little passage for the apple … transitioning into it’s own, cider that is.
the connection of words here is clever…a little sugar goes a long way indeed
nice of you to stop by
Peace
Well, that is really really cool. Loved seeing the photo over at Shawna’s. And love reading your words about it. And maybe her pulp was great fertilizer for poetry.
xo
had, it is sad she was left alone and no one cared to pick her up…the hard cider, hmmm…i am glad she is useful but it still rings for me like the kids i counsel and how they find ways, often not the healthiest…
thank you for the comment at my place too…it warmed my heart…my hopes and dreams in starting dverse are realized each week as i see the community developing…
This is wonderfully creative and clever. I’m impressed. I actually borrowed your image for a mini-blog-post. You’ll have to check it out. I’m glad I linked back to you; I know I’ll want to read this poem again and again.
Love this: “she was left there to mull things over”
“gave her a little sugar” … This should actually be “given her a little sugar.” I hope you don’t mind the edit! Of course, you have poetic license to write your lines in any way you want to. : )
Well thank you so much for the kind words and I of course do not mind your edit, I appreciate any feedback as long as it is constructive
I will be making that change, thanks. Also, I would love to stop by and check out your post, when it is up, please send me the link 
Thanks again for coming by!
Kellie
I think there are no bad apples, just different kinds. A little sugar does go a long way, too. I love this, Kellie.
how true, Laurie
Thanks for stopping in, nice to see you! 
Kellie
Great poem Kellie…often when someone falls we just grind them into the dirt instead of helping or giving a kind word. I nominated you for the Perfect Poet Award at The Poetry Palace
Thank you so much, Susie! I gladly accept!!!!
I am thrilled you enjoyed my poem! ♥ HUGS!!!
Kellie
Terrific metaphorical write. When I lived in France we had cider that you could use in place of Drano. My stomach burns just thinking of it.
yeah, there can be some pretty harsh cider lol!Thankfully I have yet to drink any as rough as Drano! whew! Thanks for sharing
Ill bet she did make a fine cider! Nice write!
guess it would be a matter of opinion lol
Thanks for coming by!
Kellie
and she would have been ok
had someone come along
and just
gave her a little sugar.. i can feel this…sometimes we fall hard and it doesn’t take much to bring us back onto our legs..but it needs the right person at the right time to do so… love the metaphor kellie
Thank you Claudia and yes, it doesn’t take much to pick someone up. I firmly believe in the small things.
Thanks for stopping by, so nice to see you here! HUGS!
Kellie
WEll!
May I say you are a great one writer too (am I?- donnot know)
I just love simple words which get so far in the soul- lots of imagery.
Thanks so much for following my blog- you’ll be in my faves sidebar
Thank you! I am thrilled you are placing ME in your sidebar! What an honor!
I am happy you like my poetry and I hope to see you again soon! Take Care!
Kellie
A creative write. I like that the imagery sinks into the conscious slowly. This character makes lemons with lemonades…smiles.
Lemonade with lemons! Yea! I like that!
Glad you enjoyed the read! Thank you!!! 
heh. love it. thats all.
Great one, Kellie!
I heard it said that a addict is a person on fire who jumps in the ocean and drowns … but you say it so much better here. – Brendan