Home Before the Rain Comes
shoes dangle
from my fingers and
I ease my way home
with bare feet patting
a damp trail of dirt and roots.
milky skies
lie on treetops and moist air
clings to my skin.
there’s a rush in the wind song;
did I close the window
and the smell of woodsy earth
and invisible rain falls,
tapping against the
leaves above me;
the sky crackles and then
a flash-
and I begin to run.
“and the smell of woodsy earth
and invisible rain falls,
tapping against the
leaves above me;”
I love the way your words captured this shower. Can just imagine that perfect sound of the heavy raindrops drops hitting the leaves as a thundershower rolls though. Beautiful! (Cool picture too!)
thank you, Ginny! Happy you enjoyed the read =)
Your descriptions are so divine ….. love you Kellie <3
awww i luv u too honey! thank you so much! xox
and the smell of woodsy earth
and invisible rain falls,
tapping against the
leaves above me;
the sky crackles and then
a flash-
and I begin to run.
That smell- ‘woodsy earth’ what a great great description…and the invisible rain…it IS like this…this was a beauty….you totally captured that moment before all hell breaks loose
Thank you, Stu. So happy you enjoyed it and also…for saying I did well at capturing the moment. Makes me happy!
You aint the only one running! Although the setting is tranquil enough, until the thunderclaps start, the creeping fear is just below the surface, ready to burst forth.
=) thank you for the comment xox
Your imagry skill, Kellie, makes it all seem so now…so there…I can smell the petrichor, feel the raindrops, and I’m runnning with you with my own shoes in hand. Love the haiga..the trembling drops on the window and the slanted rain. Wonderful poem!
Thank you so much for that wonderful compliment! Means so much to me to know that people like what I write and you are always so supportive, Much love!
Oh, this is so wonderfully perfect, a small gem, from the footprints left in the soft earth to the flash of thunder, and that simple yet perfect final line.
Without a doubt, my favourite poem of yours… and bookmark-worthy.
wow! thank you so very much for that! This one has appeared to be a hit! That doesn’t happen often but, I am sure happy when I can write one that is! Thanks a lot for that sweet comment! and for the huge smile!!! xoxxo
The magical backyard is such an eden of childhood’s eternal moment – here the coming of spring rain is a full bloom of the senses, awakening and present and alive. “milky skies lie on treetops” makes me thinks of a bed one wakes from, like a womb, to the next wonderful bed. – Brendan
sigh…. love this. i want to be there.
=) thank you
Kellie, reminds me of Smell the Rain posted on catnipoflife! A sweet simple pleasure of life is spending the afternoon doing something crazy and fun then coming home all soggy and a mess to warmth and family!
oooh will have to go read it! Can you give me a link? =)
It is on catnipoflife (http://catnipoflife.wordpress.com/) Scroll down to Couldn’t Sleep. . . Then, click the links Cotton Candy Clouds and Smell the Rain. Hope you enjoy:) Would love comments from you!
Nice and sweet.
thank you miss ayala xox
Oh, love this! If I have nowhere to be, and going no place in particular, I love walking in a soft, warm rain. That’s a wonderful rain gif too. Your prose is wonderful, even without the picture, the images you invoke would be enough to ‘see’ this.
oh my goodness thank you so very much for saying that! what a sweet compliment! Thank you for the smile!!!
Great…the way you tell it, Kellie. Love the pic that goes with it too. This would also be great performed live, I think.
Thanks! I wish I had the nerve to speak my poetry. Would love to have some audio recordings but I am too much of a chicken lol
Great poem. You hit all the senses and I was there!
awesome! Just what I set out to do! Thanks!
Mmmm, that sounds like the perfect setting for an outside run. Especially if alone, I love to play in the rain. Love this line:
“there’s a rush in the wind song”
Thank you, Shawna! =)
i love the rain…the smell of it…it really brings out the aroma of the earth…i like the gentleness of your description and smiled at the run from the thunder…been there…smiles.
Thank you, Brian. =) I don;t mind getting caught in a light rain myself. Summer rain when the sun is still out, just ahhhhhh love it!
beautiful canvas, dripping with rain drops
thank you barefoot girl
David in Maine USA
Kelly, I absolutely love your writings and plan to visit often. Thank you for following my blog and I look forward to our paths crossing many, many times even if just on paper:)
How very sweet of you to say that. Truly means alot! Thank you! and I hope we meet again as well! xox
Having lived in deep woods, I appreciate these beautiful and scary country moments shared!
=) thanks! Appreciate the read and your comment.
Beautiful…Nice work
Thank you ♥
In appreciation of your blog and with all due respect for your writing, I have nominated you for the Versatile Blogger Award.
I love it, Kellie, again, wonderful imagery; I feel as though I’m there, about to start running! And your image is perfect! I recently wrote about the rain, too, but in a different venue, if you’re interested: http://lscotthoughts.com/2012/03/17/raindrops-and-coffee.
Have a wonderful Wednesday! xx
thank you! and of course… off to read it now!
A wonderful moment we all experience. Running in the rain.
one of those sweet pleasures ♥ Thanks for reading, Walter.
Beautiful images Kellie. Thanks for sharing this.
Oh, yes! This moment really tickled my senses…
“and the smell of woodsy earth
and invisible rain falls,
tapping against the
leaves above me;”
Thank you, Kellie!
thank YOU Hannah! … for you’re support and kind words, always! xoxoxox
Absolutely, my pleasure!!
xo
Lovely! I can feel myself in this scenery.
Great! Thank you for the comment! xox
did I close the window
that made me laugh so hard- in my own case the answer’s usually “no.” I loved the atmosphere of this poem- and the image went with it perfectly
well I am happy I could make you laugh lol! Laughter can never be a bad thing
but yes… my answer is usually no as well … windows open, keys locked in car, you name it! lol
I’m getting to like coming here. I’m never disappointed with what I find.
I liked the woodsy smell and the invisible rain tapping on the leaves.
In fact, the whole poem comes together so well it brings the experience it describes to life.
That’s what I aim for! To bring the experience to life. I want to put my reader right there with me so thank you so very much for confirming that I have done it! Means more than you know! BIG HUGS!!!! xox
It reminded me of hiking in the mountains; having tree tops catch some of the rain, the smell of the rain, the sound of the wind, the crack of thunder and lightning, and walking at the campsite in bare feet from a nearby stream or pond. Very fond memories! Thank you for bringing them back to life.
That is what I had in mind. We live near the mountains and spend our summers there camping and I remember many times being caught on a trail back from fishing or swimming and the sky rumble a bit and the smells and sounds around just really are intoxicating and serene to me. I was hoping I had captured that! Thank you so much! I am thrilled you enjoyed it and thanks for the kind and confirming comment! Much gratitude! xox
It was well deserved!
Thank you for sharing…I felt I was with you each moment. Very nicely done.
Like the animation of the photo – brings the post to life.
The animation and the words are beautiful together!
amazing what you dont catch when one is lost in the rhythm of a piece..it is clear now you were in motion..duh
begin to run…I think that is such a great surprise to this poem as I assumed you were watching from a porch. It is undoubtedly more real and much more palpable this way. Great words to finish a challenging evening.
Thanks for the post.
M
This is really nice, great imagery especially “milky skies / lie on treetops.” I would offer that the word dust seems out of place. Challenges me to write a take-a-walk-in-the-woods poem.
I love how the words carry you along. Evocative piece!
Perfect lines for a rainy day! I can feel and smell the rain coming down! Beautiful work!